Squeak. Squee-rattle. Kick. Squeak. I pushed my cart containing
all of my worldly belongings down the alleyway. I had upgraded since
last we met, her and I. In her younger, cleaner days. I might have
approached her.
"Wait." She called out.
I decided she wasn't that dirty, besides, who was I to talk.
"You were there. You saw him. You have to help me."
I
dig in the top basket of my cart, pull out a half eaten hot dog. No
mustard this time, but I had bought it that way. Had a good day on my
corner.
"No, I don't need your food."
Her
sunken cheeks told me otherwise but I don't argue. I push the food
back into it's wrapper, back into my cart. "Coulda' fooled me miss."
"Uh, um." She stumbles over her words. She has not been doing this very long. Still does not see herself as one of us.
"You can call me Subway Charlie."
"Oh, I'm Mary," she makes to hold out her hand and looks at the grime covering it, laughs nervously.
She
does not know her nickname down here yet. Dairy Mary, on account of
her big... People can be so cruel. I light up half a cigarette. Offer
her a drag. She looks at it and then at me. Takes it from my
outstretched hand and finishes it in one long, slow pull. I take the
burning butt from her and use it to light another. She does not see the
glance I give her. She is looking over her shoulder.
"What's wrong Da... Mary?"
"He's still after me."
"Who is?" I knew the answer. But did she?
"The
man with the knife!" A police car passed the mouth of the ally, the
red and blue lights briefly illuminating her face. It was not just dirt
on her face, the bridge of her nose was busted open, the blood still
wet.
"Cyrus." I looked over her shoulder myself, but
did not see him. "It's not safe here." I took her hand. Despite the
dirt, the skin is still soft. I expect her to pull away but she does
not. I look her in the eyes, and she nods. Mouths 'Okay.'
I
reach into my cart, hand seeking a glass orb. I see him break from a
nearby shadow. He is running, something glints in his hand. But I find
the sphere, clasp it.
We are safe.
How much time has passed since he first saw her? In part one you describe her in her mid twenties but here you say he would have approached her in her younger days.
ReplyDeleteYour environment is a little weak here. At the start we have no sense of time or proximity in which to orient ourselves.
Your pace is a bit uneven. When she shows up its tense then stalls with the food and names and then tries to pick up when she looks over her shoulder.